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Essay (Question 1)
There
is no doubt that going green should indeed be an issue on which the government
prioritizes in large part to the variables that surround the environment that
are involved. The true question however, is to what extent the government would
go in order to satisfy their ambition. A global issue today, there are many
problems related to the environment from financial and green perspectives. In
order to solve this issue we must all work correspondently in order to come up
with an adequate solution to our problem. The key is to work together in order
to solve a problem that affects us all. Being the enforcer of the law, the
government plays a vital role in the actions of the people. Although going green
is a lot harder than merely throwing a coke can in a recycling bin, it is a
task which must be promoted and given priority by the government to an extent
to where a clear position is given, encouraged, yet not forced. In doing so
they can enforce their power and influence most effectively.
One of the
biggest factors that play a vital role in this issue is the financial
challenges that will come with this heavy task. Many companies will be making
risky investments and while engaging in so might have to endure the burden of
the transition in order to make society a “greener” place. As Source D states,
“the selling of the green economy includes much economic make believe.” The
excerpt from the article discusses the many financial myths and misconceptions
associating with green living and finances. It states that there are many
complications and high costs in the “real world”, but those issues can be
looked upon as merely an obstacle in which we must overcome in order to achieve
the goal of the true ambition and innovation being processed. With some
agency’s estimating the cost to be as low as $98 per household, there is a
strong probability that things can take a lighter toll as well.
Another
major factor that takes place in going green is obviously the environment. In
some countries such as Singapore, law that violates their intense policies when
surrounding the environment can be seen as very harsh and feared. However,
influencing by means of fear should not be the solution. The government should reach
to the extent where they provide major influence and support while not creating
menacing laws which will be feared by the people. When executing properly, many
positive results will be the outcome. As Source A states, learning to use our
natural resources with respect, we can serve future generations as well as
helping sustain life on earth for years to come. The Source also states that it
will increase innovation of plans that will result in more efficiency and
productivity, along of course making the world a cleaner and greener place to
call our home.
A very effective way the government can help
people living greener is by suggesting easy things that they can simply
incorporate into their lives that will both help themselves and the
environment. Source F states many easy actions that will help make the world a
greener place. Amongst them are taking short showers which will save water,
turning off your electronics when not in use to save electricity, and air
drying your dishes to save power. By promoting and raising awareness of simple
and easy ways to help make the world a greener place, it will become a lot
easier to do so. We can make the world a greener place by executing simple
actions which will cause us no inconvenience and will help the environment in
the process as well.
Although making the world a greener place will not prove to be an easy task to carry
out, it is one which the government must enforce and prioritize to benefit the
environment and the human race itself. They should not scare people with their
laws and requirements but rather merely help promote effective ways that will
help the world become a “greener place.” Although the government does play a
vital role, there is no doubt that the biggest role is played by us, the people
as individuals when coming together as a community to make the environment a better place to live
in that benefits everyone.
The overall essay was impressive of grammar and use of language. The opening sentence and paragraph draws the reader into the topic. the sources were used greatly to support the main thesis. The concluding paragraph redirected the main focus onto the thesis after elaborating your main thesis in the body paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteWell-developed introduction engages the reader and creates interest. Contains detailed background information and a clear explanation of the problem. Thesis clearly states a significant and compelling position. Good use of sources, supporting examples are concrete and detailed and your conclusion effectively wraps up and goes beyond restating the thesis.
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Great introduction, followed by supporting body paragraphs. The connections made allowed readers to understand the question from your perspective. Very concise and enjoyable. The use of rhetorical devices was also very well done. Review to correct any funky sentences. Good job overall!
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