Sunday, February 22, 2015

Revised Essay (Question 1)
    There is no doubt that going green should indeed be an issue on which the government prioritizes in large part to the variables that surround the environment that are involved. The true question however, is to what extent the government would go in order to satisfy their ambition. A global issue today, there are many problems related to the environment from financial and green perspectives. In order to solve this issue we must all work correspondently in order to come up with an adequate solution to our problem. The key is to work together in order to solve a problem that affects us all. Being the enforcer of the law, the government plays a vital role in the actions of the people. Although going green is a lot harder than merely throwing a coke can in a recycling bin, it is a task which must be promoted and given priority by the government to an extent to where a clear position is given, encouraged, yet not forced. In doing so they can enforce their power and influence most effectively.
    One of the biggest factors that play a vital role in this issue is the financial challenges that will come with this heavy task. Many companies will be making risky investments and while engaging in so might have to endure the burden of the transition in order to make society a “greener” place. As Source D states, “the selling of the green economy includes much economic make believe.” The excerpt from the article discusses the many financial myths and misconceptions associating with green living and finances. It states that there are many complications and high costs in the “real world”, but those issues can be looked upon as merely an obstacle in which we must overcome in order to achieve the goal of the true ambition and innovation being processed. With some agency’s estimating the cost to be as low as $98 per household, there is a strong probability that things can take a lighter toll as well.
    Another major factor that takes place in going green is obviously the environment. In some countries such as Singapore, law that violates their intense policies when surrounding the environment can be seen as very harsh and feared. However, influencing by means of fear should not be the solution. The government should reach to the extent where they provide major influence and support while not creating menacing laws which will be feared by the people. When executing properly, many positive results will be the outcome. As Source A states, learning to use our natural resources with respect, we can serve future generations as well as helping sustain life on earth for years to come. The Source also states that it will increase innovation of plans that will result in more efficiency and productivity, along of course making the world a cleaner and greener place to call our home.
     A very effective way the government can help people living greener is by suggesting easy things that they can simply incorporate into their lives that will both help themselves and the environment. Source F states many easy actions that will help make the world a greener place. Amongst them are taking short showers which will save water, turning off your electronics when not in use to save electricity, and air drying your dishes to save power. By promoting and raising awareness of simple and easy ways to help make the world a greener place, it will become a lot easier to do so. We can make the world a greener place by executing simple actions which will cause us no inconvenience and will help the environment in the process as well.
     Although making the world a greener place will not prove to be an easy task to carry out, it is one which the government must enforce and prioritize to benefit the environment and the human race itself. They should not scare people with their laws and requirements but rather merely help promote effective ways that will help the world become a “greener place.” Although the government does play a vital role, there is no doubt that the biggest role is played by us, the people as individuals when coming together as a community  to make the environment a better place to live in that benefits everyone.



3 comments:

  1. The overall essay was impressive of grammar and use of language. The opening sentence and paragraph draws the reader into the topic. the sources were used greatly to support the main thesis. The concluding paragraph redirected the main focus onto the thesis after elaborating your main thesis in the body paragraphs.

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  2. Well-developed introduction engages the reader and creates interest. Contains detailed background information and a clear explanation of the problem. Thesis clearly states a significant and compelling position. Good use of sources, supporting examples are concrete and detailed and your conclusion effectively wraps up and goes beyond restating the thesis.
    -Miriam Antonio

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  3. Great introduction, followed by supporting body paragraphs. The connections made allowed readers to understand the question from your perspective. Very concise and enjoyable. The use of rhetorical devices was also very well done. Review to correct any funky sentences. Good job overall!

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